: Critique: Are these text-based logos positioned comfortably, and do they convey elegance? Something is amiss about this logo I've made for myself. I am a design student, and soon-to-be graduate.

@Murray976

I want to portray myself as a fresh, young but old-school designer that has an appreciation for crisp, clean design, though isn't afraid to go wild.


Just my opinion.... take it with a grain of salt.

Nothing about picking a font and adjusting the letter spacing reads "isn't afraid to go wild" or even "crisp and clean". To me (someone with a designer's eye) it reads "lazy". If I can set your logo up from scratch in 5 minutes, by choosing a font and drawing a circle, is it really a good logo for a designer? There's a great deal to be said for simplicity and I don't mean to knock that. But simplicity with purpose is often better.

The uneven letter spacing really causes visual hiccups horizontally. The circle around the A should be treated as an entire character rather than applying kerning then just adding a circle.

Every part of "Martin" is spaced differently....



There's zero continuity.

Spacing each character evenly does a great deal to improve the horizontal rhythm of the word.





Simplicity with purpose. And to be fair, if it were a logo I was designing I may decrease spacing around the circle to give it a little less visual "weight" in the piece.

For this particular font, the small caps is pointless. All you are doing is increasing the first character's height by a bit. There's no added benefit. It still reads as a horizontal bar, only it's percieved (probably unconsciously) as an uneven bar due to that first character. When you add visual "wobble" like this you do more to create a mood of uneasiness or instability than anything else. This is compounded by using a very traditional, historical typeface. There's a contradiction in the visuals which doesn't work. In addition, a visual downward trend is often emotionally percieved as unfavorable. Remove the small caps.



After removing the small cap, side by side there's an immediate difference in the perception of the logo.



None of this is meant to be a definitive statement on how you should design your logo. These are merely areas I look at myself when designing.

As for the line spacing... the bottom one is better, but it doesn't really matter due to the horrible kerning.

Use of the A, for "Ashley" I assume, is clever and a decent path to follow. It's subtle and will convey meaning to those you work with. It will lead to some "ah-ha!" moments most likely, which is never a bad thing.

Conceptually, overall the idea isn't a bad one. However, I don't think it convey's "young and wild" at all. It leans more towards old world and traditional than anything else. This is primarily due to the choice of the typeface and the overall structure - straight uppercase letters. If you want "fresh, young, courageous" I think you need to scrap this and start over.

And reviews may be better if you used screenshots without the blue selection lines, unless you intend them to be part of the logo itself. In which case, yuck.

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@Becky351

Rather than critiquing your logo specifically, I think it would be more beneficial to give you some more general advice that can apply to any design.

I think this video (Aaron Draplin's logo design workflow) might be enough to get the point across, but the key things you'll want to think about here are:


Size. Should some elements of your logo be larger, and some smaller? Typically you want the largest elements to be the most important, and the smaller elements to be less important. Since I would argue that your name is the most important item in your logo, I would reduce the size of the rest.
Fonts. Are you happy with the font choices you've made? Splitting up your logo into separate text objects would give you more options here. Try a sans-serif with the second line, maybe.
Shapes. I personally like the circle, but your options here are endless- make the circle different sizes, or even make it a different shape entirely.
Colors. You might try adding a small, tactical color to your logo. Since you've said you're going for an elegant style, I would either add a very minimal amount of color or, as you have it, go with classic black and white.
Visual balance. One thing I've noticed about your logo is that it feels a little unbalanced- the large black circle is on the left, while the right side of your logo lacks anything to draw the attention. I would either move the second line over to the right or bring it up to the top line.


TL:DR; Adjust each element of your logo individually until you're happy with the result. Emphasize important elements, while remembering to deemphasize less important elements.

I'm not sure if any of this was what you were looking for, but hopefully it helps.

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@Alves566

I don't like the type but the tighter positioning on the second one is an improvement. I think the letters "RTIN" need to be tighter still to match the "MAR." Not sure what's up with the "E" in Designs but the top is terrible to me, really the font in general isn't something I care for.

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